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Image #9: Katherine Caine

across the lake
my voice raises
an echo

Graham Nunn, Australia

soji: This one really resonates with me, no pun intended. When I was 6 years old, my family moved into a small house on the edge of town, next to a farm and I heard my first echo. When told I’d just heard called an “echo” I imagined some small furry creature hiding in a haystack, somehow repeating things I would holler. Aside from my story, this is an excellent haiku for the image (or without it) because you can feel the “alone” in the image without being told about it.

first sunlight . . .
a translucent bait worm
in dad's fingers

Ron Moss, Australia

an'ya: A perfect fisherman's haiku we have here, and a fine addition to photo # 9. Even though, there is a mist/fog in the picture, the author has chosen to write about "sunlight". This lends juxtaposition to the photo as the reader anticipates that the sunlight will burn off that fog or lift that mist. A well-crafted, well thought-out piece of work.

listening
to the silence
between oarstrokes

Kilmeny Niland, Australia

soji: This haiku gives the feeling of being in the image, on the lake, without laboring every element in the image. Very definitely enhances the image without echoing it.

maple leaves
frame the lake
lone canoe

Deb Baker, USA

an'ya: This haiku focuses not on the canoe firstly, but on the maple leaves, which no one else had done. It successfully enhances the "photo as a photo," just like any frame would do, thereby making it a strong moment in my opinion. Secondly, but importantly, it diverts the reader's eye from the maple leaves to that canoe. I would suggest using a dash in line two and adding an "a" in line three, otherwise a fine observation by this author.

a languid stretch of water
thought flowing even more slowly
than the rental canoe

David Wood, USA

soji: I really liked the concept behind this, and the humor. But 21 syllables is just too much for this small poetry form, especially when a much shorter version would have done:

still morning
thoughts flow slower
than the rental canoe

the fisherman
drifts across the lake
caught by the fog

Adelaide B. Shaw, USA

an'ya: I chose this haiku for third place because it is something that might well happen to any fisherman (being caught in the fog, that is). My only suggestion would be to eliminate some of the "thes", and maybe add a dash to let the reader pause, like so:

a fisherman
drifts across the lake–
caught by fog

But, it's also fine as written.