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Image #11: Ray Rasmussen

zen garden
the shackuhachi's whisper
merges with water

kirsty karkow,USA

soji: I like the idea here, but would have preferred "tea garden" for line 1, "zen garden" seems presumptive to me.

an'ya: This haiku nicely adds sound to the picture, though perhaps a different verb than "whisper" might give readers a better grasp on what the author is talking about. Maybe even:

zen garden
the shackuhachi's melody
merges with water

which also would enhance the "m" sounds, although it's also fine as-written.

one yen thrown into
the wishing spring but the moon
is still in the sky

Ross Clark, Australia

an'ya: Although the form on this one is somewhat unconventional, I believe its author's intent is valid for this photo. I think the break could be in a different place however, and the whole haiku might be tightened up a bit, for instance:

one yen thrown
into a wishing spring - 

Anyway a nice submission overall especially if one just extends their imagination to look at this one in-depth.

soji: I picked this, yet I really had to wonder, what was the person throwing the coin wishing for if the moon remaining in the sky was significant?

bamboo garden-
the shakuhachi's notes

Sue Mill, Australia

an'ya: This haiku is my third choice for # 11 because it allows me as a reader to actually linger in the photo via sound. I might suggest a rearrangement of lines for a more of a sense of completenes and balance, like so:

bamboo garden
the lingering notes
of a shakuhachi

although it's not necessary really, just a suggestion for yet another way to use the author's same words. All in all, a straightforward haiku that enhances the picture.

soji: I found this poem of interest because although it sounds similar to my other selection for #11, I think this one sets the listener at a greater distance from the action. In the first one the "whisper", to me, is the sound of the musician blowing into the bamboo flute that "merges" with the sound of water moving, which would imply the listener being nearer. I think these two poems illustrate how a very small change in wording can make significant changes in the reader's perspective and perception. I think line 3 could be "linger" without losing anything.